Blurbs – Who Knew How Tough They Are to Write?

I still look at the blurbs for The Vista and want to tear my hair out.  They aren’t at all what I’d like them to be – in a word, perfect.  I’ve seen blurbs that are.  Sharp and flashy, that hook that draws readers in.

Mine seem like monotone tan boring prison walls.

The Vista has been out five months now, and I’ll probably redo the tag line and blurb soon.  Hopefully I can find that color, that ~pop~ I want.  Hell, writing the 108,000 words was easier than this.  (Not really, but the blurb and promo stuff is far more aggravating!)

So, Renegades; Book 2 of The Wildblood is finally back in progress.  I’m looking at a Feb., 2016 release date, barring any more Real Life train wrecks.  I’ve come up with the first tag line.  No idea how long it will last, but here it is.

Forfeiting everything they’ve established in The Vista, Team Three scatters across the Front Range in an attempt to determine where their enemies are hidden and if they have any true allies.

I think it sets the tone, and even if the reader hasn’t seen previous books in the series, they should be able to start here and understand the progression of the storyline.

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If you’d like a quick read, the prequel is approx. 75 pages.


The Vista; Book 1 of The Wildblood is a bit more ambitious, a full-on novel at approx. 350 pages.


(And, of course, the blurb.  This is the umpteenth one, I hope it’s improved from the first.)

Part of the first generation post-World War 3, Shannon Allen, Alex MacKenzie, and Geoffrey Wade are Team Three, Vista Security’s top officers. They know they are different, far beyond their elite training. It’s a secret the struggle to contain in the microcosm that is The Vista.

Problem is, there’s something out there, just beyond The Vista, watching them.

As Vista Security, they are sworn to protect; as Security Command, Team Three may be forced to break those oaths to save everything they’ve ever known.

The Vista: Book 1 of The Wildblood series takes place in the near-future where the Earth has been mostly emptied of humans by a short and devastating world war. Venturing beyond the safety of their valley may be the best move Security has ever made; it’s absolutely the most dangerous

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Lastly, my website, S. A. Hoag, Sci-Fi with a streak of rebellion.   You can find links to all the formats the books are in there.  It’s easy to navigate, too.

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